"An interesting satire, It reads like something from a Terry Gilliam movie. Sounds like it would be fun to shoot."
"Nice satire, tough subject. I couldn't help but picture this film in black and white because it reminds me of Rod Serling's Twilight Zone episodes. The description of the visuals is spare and brisk, which is appropriate to the subject as well as good craft."
Jacqueline Eve Delibes
"A very charming nightmare of a script. I particularly enjoyed the surreal 'anti-trial' scene where Karl was found innocent and sentenced to commit the crime he had already spent 20 years in prison for committing. At first I thought it might be a bit confusing but after reading it a couple of times I realized that might be one of its strengths. It should make the viewers think about the film long after they have seen it and interpret it however they might. Much of the humor grows out of the surreal interactions between the various types of people. I would play up the bizarreness as much as possible and film it in gritty black and white like "Pi: Faith in Chaos" by Darren Aronofsky, or Orson Well's brilliant adaptation of Kafka's "The Trial."
CHARACTERS: The characters are great. I see a lot of possibilities for developing them to the extreme. Karl has the resigned, world-weary air of Marcello Mastroianni in Fellini's "8 1/2". The fat cook would be interesting as an ex-boxer type with broken teeth, stubble on his face, cauliflower ears and a broken snout-like nose that gives him the look of a pig. The court official is also interesting. I wondered if she wore dark lipstick and a too-tight mannish suit and her hair in braids. The two attorneys would be great if their differences were exaggerated as much as possible; one very tall and one very short. The judge could be a bit senile as well as blind. Give the young man who is a witness against Karl a few tattoos and a mohawk hairdo. The young guard who escorts Karl out of prison would be wonderful if he were sensitive and beautiful to a surrealistic degree.
DIALOGUE: Exceptional. Exactly right. Not a word to many.
ACTION DESCRIPTIONS: I loved the surrealistic mad tea party air that permeates the entire script. The actions conveyed that mood very successfully.
PACING: There are no scenes that do not contribute to the progression of the story."
Leroy Arthur Burt